You have a good start here i didn't notice any glaring flaws or anything though i did notice an odd grammatical mistake, you wrote: "rather sooner then later" a couple of times, it should be: "sooner rather then later" it's a small thing but it reads better.
Other then that you have an interesting premise and so far the characters we've met have been interesting even if we haven't really spoken to them much yet
In the top right corner you'll notice some symbols, the third one along is the save button, press it then you get a menu for multiple saves, on the left side of that menu is more of the same symbols, press one to save. If you want to load a save just press the play button in the same menu next to the save you just made
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wait—it mentions romance in the description, so is the romance with the vampire lord it mentions, other characters that will be in the story, or both?
You have a good start here i didn't notice any glaring flaws or anything though i did notice an odd grammatical mistake, you wrote: "rather sooner then later" a couple of times, it should be: "sooner rather then later" it's a small thing but it reads better.
Other then that you have an interesting premise and so far the characters we've met have been interesting even if we haven't really spoken to them much yet
I think it works both ways, it's probably a dialect difference, but it should be 'than' not 'then'
saw this posted on a tumblr about being out finally and had to check it out ofc!
very interesting so far and def cant wait for more(i can, take many deserved breaks :) )
though i am a bit confused on if we can save\reload saves or not? may just be blind LMAO
In the top right corner you'll notice some symbols, the third one along is the save button, press it then you get a menu for multiple saves, on the left side of that menu is more of the same symbols, press one to save. If you want to load a save just press the play button in the same menu next to the save you just made